crtique my online dating profile

[apg96]

I am 18 yrs old, and i attend Arizona State. I live in Orange County, CA when im not attending school. I like to watching movies, party, hang out with friends, and anything to do with cars (except NASCAR). I like to surf when i get a chance, and snowboard. Im not looking for anything too serious. Just looking for someone to hang out with, maybe go to a few bars or clubs with. Also someone that would be happy with just hanging out one night at home, or maybe going and catching a movie. If you think you can do that, email me, you wont be disappointed.

So what do you guys think i should change to come out as more of an alpha? My hope is that with this i will be able to build up some confidence, maybe then start a short fling or 2, and then more one from there.

[Satan]

Wow, that sounds so needy man, it's like a job application!

Ask yourself what is it like? How does it feel?

Hey I'm apg96, and you made an exellent choice visiting my page, you sexy fucker! (strong introduction).

I LOVE surfing, there's nothing like the rush of catching a massive wave, as the air blows in my (beautiful) face. (go into a story)

You must have great taste reading this so drop me a message, I won't bite (unless you're lucky). (end)

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[Superfreak]

IMHO yea that profile sucks, but its ok lets get it fixed up a bit...

I am the type of guy thats into the extreme, I am passionate about surfing, snowboarding and cars. Currently I attend school at Arizona State, but I also spend a lot of time in the OC, Yes I am from Orange County, CA the place that one TV show is about, and like the main character I can be a bit of a bad boy at times.

I lead a busy life and tend to be a bit picky about those I let in, I have no time for games or drama queens. So shoot me an email and we will see where things take us.

OK now I put this together just from your profile you made, keep in mind though that profiles almost always will need tweaked as you go, and you should always test them to see the response, If you are not getting results do not be afraid to change things up.

I would recommend that you use Myspace for testing and possibly as a dating site of types as it is free and the results tend to be better than most dating sites.

[Superfreak]

Wow, that sounds so needy man, it's like a job application!

Ask yourself what is it like? How does it feel?

Hey I'm apg96, and you made an exellent choice visiting my page, you sexy fucker! (strong introduction).

I LOVE surfing, there's nothing like the rush of catching a massive wave, as the air blows in my (beautiful) face. (go into a story)

You must have great taste reading this so drop me a message, I won't bite (unless you're lucky). (end)

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yea we both were working on a reply at the same time and both profiles are on the money. Though personally I would not recommend that he goes too cocky the reason being is that if he does meet up with them I do not think his current frame is there yet and he will not live up to the hype. So the girl will feel like he lied to her.

[apg96]

thanks guys, those were great. I used superfreak's for now, b/c of concerns about my frame working with the first.

Any ideas on what to use for my tag line? Like before this one sucks too.

"Adam, your pass to a better life."

It cant be much longer than that, they have a limit on length.

[HUGE AL]

i attend Arizona State. I live in Orange County, CA when im not attending school.

Dude, you live in OC AND Tempe! ASU has a 3:1 girl to guy ratio and hot weather (except for now) where girls have to get in shape to wear their half shirts and shorts (although I did see 3 fat ones when I was there a couple months ago on business). Stop dinking around online and get out in the field. Those two cities are like shooting fish in a barrel.

[apg96]

Dude, you live in OC AND Tempe! ASU has a 3:1 girl to guy ratio and hot weather (except for now) where girls have to get in shape to wear their half shirts and shorts (although I did see 3 fat ones when I was there a couple months ago on business). Stop dinking around online and get out in the field. Those two cities are like shooting fish in a barrel.

yes i know, i plan on doing both. BUt i just want to get laid right now, and i dont want to wait till next weekend to find some easy bimo to fuck.

As i said above this was to help me get some more confidence with women in general, even if its just through emails or if it becomes a month long relationship.

[HUGE AL]

yes i know, i plan on doing both. BUt i just want to get laid right now, and i dont want to wait till next weekend to find some easy bimo to fuck.

As i said above this was to help me get some more confidence with women in general, even if its just through emails or if it becomes a month long relationship.

I hear you man, but one of the most common problems people encounter when they find The Community is after learning all the "stuff," they want to try Online Game. You said you want to use it to build your confidence, however, by skipping over the initial social interactions, you're doing yourself a great disservice. The best way to build your confidence is to go through the pain period of interacting with people normally (read: face-to-face). Only after you've gotten that part down well should you even consider dabbling with online stuff. We've all said it before, the quality you get online is not nearly as good as in person. Plus, most of them are CRAZY.

You don't have to wait for the weekend. Just head to the library and the MU any time of the day. Super easy and fun sets. Every time I'm in Tempe on business I make a point to stop on campus.

I totally envy your locations -- and I'm in LA!

[apg96]

you know HUGE AL you make a great point. I believe it was hypnotica who said you have to go to the extreme to get used to it. He always talked about where a strap on, on his head. NOt sure if im ready to go there, but i will definitely start sarging more. I have started it in class with girls im sitting next too. BUt ill step it up a notch.

[HUGE AL]

Great attitude. Let us know how it goes...

[Hawaii]

I respectfully think you should focus on spending more time sarging live in field than online. Its ok to use online sarging as a supplement to your game, but just don't use it as a substitute and become an armchair pua or KJ.

[wukidd]

if you dig blonde chicks then include in your profile "i only talk to brunetts" or some other disqualifier stuff (stolen from one of the David D seminars)