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Axle87
12-22-2011, 10:51 AM
So I'm a musician, and I've got a lot of great stories from gigs etc. that I want to convert to A2 DHV material. Here is one:

"You know I got evacuated from a gig one time by helicopter. My band was booked to play this wedding up in the mountains. It was a four mile hike in with all our gear to the retreat camp where they were having it. It was a great gig. They had food and beer out for us, we played the ceremony and the reception, and we were the perfect band for them. It went on until about midnight, so we spent the night in a bunkhouse. In the morning we woke up to the smell of smoke...the next valley over was on fire and it was looking like it was going to come over the ridge! The forest service closed the trail out. We thought we were going to be stuck, but the L.A. County rescue helicopter was available so we all hiked out on to this Vietnam style landing zone cut out of the hillside. It wasn't a very big landing pad...about the size of blah blah blah. Next thing I know there's a giant marine helicopter coming down on top of us. It was too big to land, so it just touched down it's front landing gear on the hillside and hovered with the tail off the mountain while we loaded in to it. It took a bunch of trips to get all 50 of us out. It felt like being in an action movie."

Tear it apart, give me advice on how to make it PUA worthy...it is a true story.

AristotleIV
12-22-2011, 01:51 PM
PUA worthy? Say it with less words and make the delivery priceless like the memory.