Cogo
04-17-2011, 03:52 PM
Here is one routine I have come up whit. I call it the “Pimped Bus Driver” Routine. It is based on what really happened to me one time. I have tried this routine by cutting the thread and stacking forward into another routine in the hopes that the set will beg me to finish this Pimped Bus Driver story. But they don’t. I would like some Ideas on how I can change the story to make the beginning of the story more captivating and anticipating so that they really want to hear it all the way to the end.
Here is what really happened:
I once took on the role as a diplomat in a very loud quarrel that I sort of wasnt really involved in. It was late. I was on a bus on my way home from a party. Then two teenage guys got on the bus. One of them showed his stamp ticket and got his stamp but the other guy sneaked in behind without showing any ticket. The bus driver tried to tell the guy but got ignored. So the driver stamped again on the other guys ticket figuring that they were buddys. The guy whit the ticket then got really pissed. “What the fk are you doing!? I dont know that guy! You are a fking idiot!!... Dam Idiot... blablabla... ” he said as he whent to sit down in the back of the bus where this free passenger also was sitting. So the bus driver were right about them being friends. Then the bus driver stood up and said “Hay you! Get off the bus! You don’t call me Idiot. Now get off the bus!!” But the guy didnt obey and just sat there being cocky. There was no doubt in my mind that the bus driver was very determined not to drive on before the guy got off. So I told the guy “Hey dude. Its late. We all wanna go home. Why don’t you apologize to him? Its obvious the he won’t drive on before you get off.” He replied “I don’t give a dam. I aint getting off”. So I said “Come on! Look, apologize to him. I’m sure he will drive on.”.He was reluctant but eventually I managed to convince him. As he went to apologize I said “Now do it in a good way!” The guy went up to the driver. He put his hand on the drivers shoulder and said in an emotional way “I’m Sorry.” Kind of abrupt I guess. So for a moment… there was a complete silence in the bus… <paus> the motors was turned off… <paus> . The driver was sitting quiet at the wheel. Everyone was wondering if he would drive on or not. Eventually he turned on the motor and off we went .
Now here below is an altered version spiced up whit some more DHV spikes. This altered version is not field tested yet. I would love it if I could get some feed back and ideas on how to make the story more fun. Like the buss driver beats the shit out of the guy and I rip up my shirt and out comes Super Man to the poor cocky guys rescue or what ever. And it would be great if I could get some ideas on how this could be turned into some kind of buying temperature stuff.
Altered version whit more DHV spikes:
I once took on the role as a diplomat in a very loud quarrel that I sort of wasn’t really involved in. It was late. Me and a girl I just met(pre-selection DVH) on a friends party(social alignments DHV) were on our way to my plays. She was my dream girl by the way(willingness to emote DHV if I say it with great emotion, right?? Correct me if I’m wrong). She ended up becoming a long term girlfriend (willingness to commit DHV). Then two teenage guys got on the bus. One of them showed his stamp ticket and got his stamp but the other guy sneaked in behind without showing any ticket. The bus driver tried to tell the guy but got ignored. So the driver stamped again on the other guys ticket figuring that they were buddys. The guy whit the ticket then got really pissed. “What the fk are you doing!? I dont know that guy! You are a fking idiot!!... Dam Idiot... blablabla... ” he said as he went to sit down in the back of the bus where this free passenger also was sitting. So the bus driver were right about them being friends. Then the bus driver stood up and said “Hay you! Get off the bus! You don’t call me Idiot. Now get off the bus!!” But the guy didn’t obey and just sat there being cocky. There was no doubt in my mind that the bus driver was very determined not to drive on before the guy got off. So I told the guy “Hey dude. Its late. We all wanna go home. Why don’t you apologize to him? Its obvious the he won’t drive on before you get off.” He replied “I don’t care. I aint getting off!”. So I said “Come on! Look, apologize to him. I’m sure he will drive on.”.He was reluctant but eventually I managed to convince him. As he went to apologize I said “Now do it in a good way!”(Leader of men DHV) The guy went up to the driver. He put his hand on the drivers shoulder and said in a deep emotional way “I’m Sorry.” Kind of abrupt I guess. So for a moment… there was a complete silence in the bus… <paus> the motors was turned off… <paus> . The driver was sitting quiet at the wheel. Everyone was wondering if he would drive on or not. Eventually he turned on the motor and off we went .
Now here is a shorter version. It is not field tested.
Shorter version as a Leader of Men DHV sound byte:
Yesterday I took on the role as a diplomat… There was this guy who had been very rude to the bus driver… So I told him to apologize... And he did
There is quite a bit of open loops here Isn’t that great! By the way, isn’t the kindness DHV also flipped right here in this little soundbyte? Correct me if I’m wrong. And also, could there be a risk that I come of as bragging if I say that I took on the role as a diplomat?
Maybe it would be less bragging if the soundbyte goes like this:
Yesterday… on my bus ride home… there was this guy who was really rude to the bus driver… the bus driver got really pissed and told the guy to get of the buss… he refused… I told him to apologize… and so he did… and the bus drove on.
Or would it be less bragging if I say “I got to play diplomat yesterday… “ instead of “Yesterday I took on the role as diplomat… ” ?
I am open for suggestions any way.
Here is what really happened:
I once took on the role as a diplomat in a very loud quarrel that I sort of wasnt really involved in. It was late. I was on a bus on my way home from a party. Then two teenage guys got on the bus. One of them showed his stamp ticket and got his stamp but the other guy sneaked in behind without showing any ticket. The bus driver tried to tell the guy but got ignored. So the driver stamped again on the other guys ticket figuring that they were buddys. The guy whit the ticket then got really pissed. “What the fk are you doing!? I dont know that guy! You are a fking idiot!!... Dam Idiot... blablabla... ” he said as he whent to sit down in the back of the bus where this free passenger also was sitting. So the bus driver were right about them being friends. Then the bus driver stood up and said “Hay you! Get off the bus! You don’t call me Idiot. Now get off the bus!!” But the guy didnt obey and just sat there being cocky. There was no doubt in my mind that the bus driver was very determined not to drive on before the guy got off. So I told the guy “Hey dude. Its late. We all wanna go home. Why don’t you apologize to him? Its obvious the he won’t drive on before you get off.” He replied “I don’t give a dam. I aint getting off”. So I said “Come on! Look, apologize to him. I’m sure he will drive on.”.He was reluctant but eventually I managed to convince him. As he went to apologize I said “Now do it in a good way!” The guy went up to the driver. He put his hand on the drivers shoulder and said in an emotional way “I’m Sorry.” Kind of abrupt I guess. So for a moment… there was a complete silence in the bus… <paus> the motors was turned off… <paus> . The driver was sitting quiet at the wheel. Everyone was wondering if he would drive on or not. Eventually he turned on the motor and off we went .
Now here below is an altered version spiced up whit some more DHV spikes. This altered version is not field tested yet. I would love it if I could get some feed back and ideas on how to make the story more fun. Like the buss driver beats the shit out of the guy and I rip up my shirt and out comes Super Man to the poor cocky guys rescue or what ever. And it would be great if I could get some ideas on how this could be turned into some kind of buying temperature stuff.
Altered version whit more DHV spikes:
I once took on the role as a diplomat in a very loud quarrel that I sort of wasn’t really involved in. It was late. Me and a girl I just met(pre-selection DVH) on a friends party(social alignments DHV) were on our way to my plays. She was my dream girl by the way(willingness to emote DHV if I say it with great emotion, right?? Correct me if I’m wrong). She ended up becoming a long term girlfriend (willingness to commit DHV). Then two teenage guys got on the bus. One of them showed his stamp ticket and got his stamp but the other guy sneaked in behind without showing any ticket. The bus driver tried to tell the guy but got ignored. So the driver stamped again on the other guys ticket figuring that they were buddys. The guy whit the ticket then got really pissed. “What the fk are you doing!? I dont know that guy! You are a fking idiot!!... Dam Idiot... blablabla... ” he said as he went to sit down in the back of the bus where this free passenger also was sitting. So the bus driver were right about them being friends. Then the bus driver stood up and said “Hay you! Get off the bus! You don’t call me Idiot. Now get off the bus!!” But the guy didn’t obey and just sat there being cocky. There was no doubt in my mind that the bus driver was very determined not to drive on before the guy got off. So I told the guy “Hey dude. Its late. We all wanna go home. Why don’t you apologize to him? Its obvious the he won’t drive on before you get off.” He replied “I don’t care. I aint getting off!”. So I said “Come on! Look, apologize to him. I’m sure he will drive on.”.He was reluctant but eventually I managed to convince him. As he went to apologize I said “Now do it in a good way!”(Leader of men DHV) The guy went up to the driver. He put his hand on the drivers shoulder and said in a deep emotional way “I’m Sorry.” Kind of abrupt I guess. So for a moment… there was a complete silence in the bus… <paus> the motors was turned off… <paus> . The driver was sitting quiet at the wheel. Everyone was wondering if he would drive on or not. Eventually he turned on the motor and off we went .
Now here is a shorter version. It is not field tested.
Shorter version as a Leader of Men DHV sound byte:
Yesterday I took on the role as a diplomat… There was this guy who had been very rude to the bus driver… So I told him to apologize... And he did
There is quite a bit of open loops here Isn’t that great! By the way, isn’t the kindness DHV also flipped right here in this little soundbyte? Correct me if I’m wrong. And also, could there be a risk that I come of as bragging if I say that I took on the role as a diplomat?
Maybe it would be less bragging if the soundbyte goes like this:
Yesterday… on my bus ride home… there was this guy who was really rude to the bus driver… the bus driver got really pissed and told the guy to get of the buss… he refused… I told him to apologize… and so he did… and the bus drove on.
Or would it be less bragging if I say “I got to play diplomat yesterday… “ instead of “Yesterday I took on the role as diplomat… ” ?
I am open for suggestions any way.